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Post by Runningfoot on Apr 16, 2007 10:23:06 GMT -5
OOC:oh, i get it, the ending you promised. next chapter please!
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Post by Moonstar on Apr 16, 2007 12:25:25 GMT -5
What ending was that?
Lector! The name frightened all of the cats. “No.” Bluepelt whispered. “He’s a legend. A gruesome story some sick cat made up.” But Stonescar was staring at Rainfeather’s bones. “I’ll avenge you. I swear by StarClan I will.” He murmured. Suddenly mewling distracted them. Jadeeye hurried over where he saw a kit tangled in the brambles. “Squirrelkit! What happened?” He demanded. “Cloverleaf said she was taking me to meet friends. But then she hit and said something about taking me to a new home. Then Rainfeather appeared and she…she…killed him!” Jadeeye felt sick. He shook his head in denial as Bluepelt ran her tail comfortingly across his flank. “No. No. No, no, no! StarClan, no!” He yowled. “He must be mistaken. Cloverleaf would never hurt anybody! I know her!” Stonescar looked at him, the strange gentleness back in his eyes. “Jadeeye. Do you trust her, Cloverleaf?” The RiverClan cat nodded. “With my life.” He rasped. “Do you trust her because you can trust her, or because you want to trust her?” The gray and white tom asked. Jadeeye couldn’t answer, though he knew in his heart that it was because he wanted to. Stonescar turned to Squirrelkit. “Did you see anyone else?” He nodded. “There was a black she-cat, smelled like…her.” He flicked his tail at Fernstone. “No! Not Nightfur!” She yowled in grief. Stonescar pushed his nose into her flank, but kept listening. “And a white one that smelled…sort of like her.” The kit flicked his tail at Bluepelt. Her hackles rose. “Webpaw! I might’ve known!” The kit continued, “And a tortoiseshell who smelled like…you a bit.” Stonescar gasped. “Owlmoon? He’s a medicine cat!” Stonescar shook his head, regretting any curtness he had shown the young tortoiseshell. However, his regret was soon pushed away by the hatred for Lector, Cloverleaf, and all these cats who had taken the life of one of their allies.
Feeling like his feet weighed one-hundred pounds, Jadeeye trudged home, Squirrelkit dangling from his jaws. Squirrelkit was five moons; he was smart enough by now not to make up or story or to be mistaken. Cloverleaf was a killer. When Jadeeye got back to the camp, he was shocked to see Cloverleaf had gotten back first, and was retelling the event to the Clan. “This legend ‘Lector’ is a true creature I regret to say.” The gray she-cat was saying, false grief choking her voice. “Rainfeather and I bravely pursued him, but it was no use. Rainfeather was slain, along with Squirrelkit.” A distraught wail came up from one of the queens, who hurried to see her other kits, followed by a warrior named, Firehawk, her mate. But at that moment Jadeeye leapt onto the Riverstone, along with Squirrelkit. “Cats of RiverClan!” Jadeeye yowled. “Cloverleaf’s account is not true! Not completely.” Firehawk turned just into to show his mate that their kit was still alive. “It’s Squirrelkit, Dreampelt! StarClan brought him back.” He coaxed the gray she-cat out of the nursery, At the sight of her lost kit, Dreampelt hurried over and gently took Squirrelkit from Jadeeye, blinking gratefully. Cloverleaf was looking pleadingly at the light brown tabby. He began to weaken. Should he just announce that Squirrelkit was alive? The StarClan cats surrounded him. “Rise hero…” They said, and were gone. Bravely he lifted his head. “Cloverleaf convinced Squirrelkit to come with he rout of the nursery,” Shocked yowls came from the cats, and Squirrelkit nodded earnestly. “She claimed they were going to visit some cats, but then told him she was taking him to a ‘new home’. When Squirrelkit protested this she struck him.” At this Dreampelt, hissing at Cloverleaf ushered Squirrelkit into the protection of the nursery. “Rainfeather bravely tried to save this kit, but was murdered by Cloverleaf. A ThunderClan cat found his body and told me of his death. Though it wasn’t his body they found. It was done by Lector, the cannibal!” There shocked gasps from below. Littlestar turned to Cloverleaf. “Is this true?” He hissed. DarkClan took over Cloverleaf again. Now she wasn’t Cloverleaf. She was Bloodstar. “Yes. Rainfeather knew too much for his own good. He was weak, and I have a bargain to uphold Lector. This isn’t over, RiverClan! Lector and GreatClan shall pick off more of you, we will!” Bloodstar was being chased away from the camp, but she didn’t care. Jadeeye had betrayed her. There was nothing left in
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Post by Runningfoot on Apr 16, 2007 12:40:57 GMT -5
u know, at school, nice, next chapter please!lol
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Post by Moonstar on Apr 18, 2007 19:57:03 GMT -5
Oh, Rainfeather. Yeah, he was only there because I wanted to tempt Moonstar. I probably should've made it his grandson or something. Oh well, I'd be more upset about killing an apprentice/young warrior rather than the oldest elder in RiverClan.
A moon had passed. Jadeeye hadn’t really gotten over the reality of Bloodstar’s betrayal. However, there was one thing that could lift his spirits. He now had an apprentice! Squirrelkit had his apprentice ceremony, and Jadeeye was made his mentor due to their close friendship after Jadeeye took him home. “These are the Fourtrees,” Jadeeye said, new authority in his voice as mentor. “Every full moon the Clans meet here at the Gathering.” Squirrelpaw sniffed the air. “It smells weird! It’s like a mix between other Clans and rogues.” The scent crept into the warrior’s nostrils as well. The young apprentice was right. Then a disturbingly familiar scent reached him. Cloverleaf! “Cloverleaf’s been this way. We have to go back and warn the camp!” Just as the light brown tom said those words, a patrol of warriors came charging out. They were mostly rogues, but the scent of the Clans also mingled with them. He recognized warriors from Gatherings: Flashclaw of ThunderClan, Mudfeather of WindClan, and Deadclaw of ShadowClan. For a moment he wondered why there were no RiverClan cats, but then he remembered her hatred for RiverClan. Bloodstar immediately pinned Jadeeye. “I thought you loved me, Jadeeye. I loved you. Perhaps I still do. And you punish the ones you love!” She hissed. “I’ll make your death slow and painful. With a companion being slain.” The frantic yowl made terror rush through the RiverClan warrior as he realized who the companion was. “Squirrelpaw!” He growled, and saw Lector pining him, a hungry look in his eyes. The gray she-cat held his head in positon. “Watch. Watch him be slain and devoured.” “No, StarClan please…” He whispered. Suddenly there was a mad yowl. “Die, scum!” Stonescar’s voice rang out. Now Squirrelpaw was out of Lector’s grasp, and there was a whirling tussle of black, white, and gray. A jet-black she-cat flung herself at Deadclaw. A blue-gray she-cat leapt at Webpaw, named Webtail by Bloodstar. “Squirrelpaw, run!” The red-brown tom didn’t respond, just lunge at Bloodstar. He fastened his fangs on the traitor’s neck. Jadeeye squirmed out from under her and sank his teeth into her spine. “I should’ve killed you two when I had the chance…” She hissed, then her head fell, lifeless. Jadeeye looked in shock. “We killed her…I never thought I could.” Stonescar, Fernstone, and Bluepelt staggered over. “There are too many! But if you cut off the head, the body will die.” Stonescar rasped. Suddenly, Bloodstar lifted her head. She laughed insanely. The five stared in shock. No cat could’ve survive Jadeeye and Squirrelpaw’s attack!
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Post by Runningfoot on Apr 19, 2007 9:54:42 GMT -5
OOC:nine lives.cool chapter! next chapter please!
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Post by Moonstar on Apr 19, 2007 16:46:22 GMT -5
Yep. The next chapter's almost finished, and I'd finish right now but I'm not on my PC.
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Post by Runningfoot on Apr 19, 2007 16:53:35 GMT -5
oh arge
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Post by Moonstar on Apr 19, 2007 16:57:16 GMT -5
Sorry, but it'll come soon, perhaps today. BTW, I started what some other peeps in the online world have done, and started my version of the Sight. However, in five days the Sight's coming out in five days. I can't finish it in that short a time. Should I bother post it when I finish this?
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Post by Runningfoot on Apr 19, 2007 18:33:34 GMT -5
yeah finish this first!
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Post by Moonstar on Apr 19, 2007 20:17:01 GMT -5
OK. BTW, when I post the Sight thing, and the Sight's out, I don't want to be told how inaccurate it is, 'cause when I started it I hadn't read the Sight, duh.
Jadeeye quickly realized that they needed to escape. It didn’t matter that Bloodstar was alive, he couldn’t kill his friends. “Stonescar, all of you, with me!” He headed off towards RiverClan, keeping Squirrelpaw in front to keep him from following behind. Some looked doubtful at going to RiverClan, but the three followed. RiverClan was the closest. Charging into the camp, a queen named Dusklily approached him, head hanging low. “Jayfeather’s been named deputy. Goldfire’s dead…what’s the matter?” Jadeeye felt a short rush of sympathy, remembering Goldfire was her mate, and shock, but then remembered his friends and Bloodstar. “Cloverleaf…Squirrelpaw and I killed her but…she came back! She’s coming to camp!” Duskliliy blinked in disbelief, when suddenly their pursuers came charging into camp. Littlestar and his warriors stepped forward. Jayfeather, the new deputy winked at slightly at Jadeeye, who looked alarmed. “What are you afraid of? You‘re the one who drove her out.” He teased, but the younger warrior could see alarm flash through his mentor’s eyes. “Scared you’ll join StarClan too early?” The light brown tabby tom asked gently. Jayfeather’s shoulder twitched. “I guess. I’m more afraid I’ll have to become leader.” The RiverClan deputy shook his silvery head. “But I’m just being paranoid. Just after Goldfire disappeared presumably dead…” “What?” Jadeeye gasped. “They didn’t find his body…” Bloodstar and Lector stepped forward. Behind them Webtail and Nightfur were carrying something in their jaws. “Cats of RiverClan,” The gray she-cat called. “We reveal your deputy’s fate!” Webtail and Nightfur through forward bones! The same type of gnawed bones that were the remains of Rainfeather. Dusklily wailed in grief. Bloodstar glanced disdainfully at her. “Stop moaning, or you’ll be the first to join him.” She snapped. Littlestar strode up to her, face to face. “You are not welcome here. You and your scum defile our land. Go!” Bloodstar lunged at Littlestar. The small black and white tom was pinned, but slashed at her soft, exposed belly. The RiverClan cats (and Stonescar, Fernstone, and Bluepelt) also jumped into the fray. Stonescar was fighting a crowd of GreatClan cats, trying to reach Lector, hatred burning in yellow eyes. Deadclaw’s life slipped away as Fernstone’s teeth locked on his neck. Bluepelt was in a whirling tussle with Mudfeather, who tried to stop her from getting Webtail. Suddenly there was a hoarse cry, “Jadeeye!” The RiverClan cat hurried over to where Flashclaw stood over Jayfeather. He knocked Flashclaw off him, where he was pinned by two warriors, one of them Stonescar. The blue-gray tom smiled up at his former apprentice. “Thank you. That traitor would’ve probably taken me to Lector. I can die like this.” He rasped. Jadeeye shook his head. “You’ll be fine…” He sobbed. Jayfeather just weakly called, “Littlestar!” The black and white tom nodded understandingly, with pain stricken eyes. “I say these words before the body of Jayfeather so that his spirit shall hear and approve my choice…” Jadeeye’s head bowed. “Jadeeye shall be deputy.” He lifted his head in shock. Then he turned angrily to Bloodstar. She’d have to face him as a RiverClan deputy now.
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Post by Moonstar on Apr 20, 2007 21:09:58 GMT -5
Kinda rushed, but I finished it last night. I might've edited it today, but Moonstar not feelin' so great. Vomitting on an empty stomach is /not/ fun.
The gray GreatClan leader could hardly keep herself from trembling. Jadeeye was now willing to kill her eight more times. He was on her in an instant. His teeth clung to her throat, and thorn sharp claws dug into her flesh. She struggled feebly, but it was useless. “Lector! Help me!” She rasped. But before the black cannibal could react, Stonescar was on him. He scratched at Lector’s eyes, blinding him permanently in one. The ThunderClan warrior’s teeth gleamed as he pulled his lips back. “You like to eat cats, eh? Well, I’ll rip at your insides and make you eat them!” He spat. Slash! Again he lashed out at Lector. The black tom inched away. But Stonescar lunged forward to make the kill.
Her second life slipped away. The GreatClan leader had seven more. “Spirits of DarkClan, save me!” She yowled. The bloodstained bones were now also visible to Jadeeye. They surrounded him, and hissed their intense hiss. The sight was truly unbearable. Only an at least slightly evil cat would be able to put up with their stare. And they did stare at Jadeeye, with blank, terrifying red eyes. Overcome with terror, Jadeeye collapsed.
“He’s almost joined us. I shall do what I can.” The light brown tabby whispered. A dappled tortoiseshell nodded. “You are a good medicine cat, Leafpool. But we are not the cats to do this.” She flicked her tail at the cats made from the stars. They entered the limp cat’s body. “Fight, Jadeeye. We shall grant you strength…”
Bloodstar thought she had killed him. But Jadeeye got up, a light in his eyes. The eyes stared at her, showing her judgment. Death and DarkClan. “You’ve become a great warrior. But you could’ve been a great warrior without being evil.” Jadeeye spoke with the wisdom filled voice of a cat many moons older than himself. Bloodstar was afraid and bolted. Jadeeye was on her heels, running with the speed of StarClan. Frantically she tried to think of an escape. A usually horrific sight brought her hope. The gorge! She closed her eyes and leapt forward. The gray she-cat knew she had killed herself. That didn’t matter. She just wanted to escape that…thing pursuing her. Something stopped Jadeeye from running after her. StarClan. All nine lives were taken as she fell. The StarClan cat’s left Jadeeyes’s body. He looked down, filled with grief, though he knew it was undeserved.
Bluepelt touched noses with Jadeeye when he arrived. “It’s nice to see you. How are Morningstream’s kits?” She asked. Jadeeye swelled with pride at the mention of his mate and his kits. “ They’re doing great! I wonder how…oh, they’ve grown!” Fernstone and Stonescar appeared carrying two kits. One light gray, the other jet black. “These are our kits. This black one’s the tom, Blackkit. And the light gray one’s a she-cat…her name is Cloverkit.” The two parents waited to see how Jadeeye would react. After a pause, he said, “May she become who Bloodstar should’ve been.”
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Post by Runningfoot on Apr 21, 2007 16:29:38 GMT -5
wow is it done?
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Post by Moonstar on Apr 22, 2007 16:02:42 GMT -5
Yeah...maybe when I have too much time on my hands I'll actually make it half-way decent.
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Post by Runningfoot on Apr 28, 2007 19:25:25 GMT -5
lol, you underestimate your work, Mr. Moonstar i think this calls for, say, 10 gl!
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Post by Moonstar on Apr 28, 2007 21:28:11 GMT -5
Thank you! Maybe it's half-way decent with the writing style, but I wrapped it up too quickly. I never said what really happened to Webpaw, Owlpaw, and Nightpaw. I haven't really thought of that, so use your imagination.
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